Hello everyone!! My name is Dorothy.
Today, I will compare with "Camp Big Apple" and "Ranch West Camp. There are many things that I have to compare. " First of all, Big Apple is the three week camp, but Ranch West Camp is the four week camp. Second, Big Apple is only doing English language like the SAT, but Ranch West Camp is doing Math, Art, History, Science, Politics, World Cultures, Music, Computer Programming and Literature. Third, Big Apple Camp is three week intensive camp, but Ranch West Camp is four week camp in rural Canada. Usually, the fourth is Big Apple's other activities are tours of the city, trips to local museums and tickets to Broadway shows. For Ranch West Camp, the other activities are horseback riding, river rafting, hiking, canoeing and mountain biking.
I think Ranch West Camp is more better for me students because Big Apple Camp is just studying English SAT, but Ranch West Camp is studying Math, Art, History, Science, Politics, World Cultures, Music, Computer Programming and Literature. That is more good for me. It could be sad because Apple Camp is only three weeks but Ranch West Camp is more than one week, which mean four week.
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I hope you will enjoy my essay!!^^
Nice work, but I think you can use more transition words. Also, we should look at the format.
답글삭제Ok, I will do more better next time..
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